Kontaktformular at Berlin.de for visa status

Hello everyone,

After two years of work experience I have decided to have my postgraduate studies in Germany. Although I'm applying to English taught courses, I had registered to intensive language courses at Berlin Goethe Institut, because I believe it is important to learn the native language first.

My courses were supposed to start on 26.10.2015, as I had applied for national visa on 14.09.2015, and I have been told I would get a response within a month. Now it's been almost two months, I had postponed my course to 23.11. Protected content I still didn't get any response. German Embassy/Ankara told me that my visa application is in Berlin to response. Asking for advice to some people, I have found this website Protected content , but they told me to write in German.

Below is what I would like to consult them written in English, and an online German translation of it. If you would be so kind, can anyone please tell me whether it is understandable for its purpose or it just sounds funny?

"Hello,

I had registered for intensive language course at Goethe Institut Berlin starting on 26.10.2015. I applied for national visa on 14.09.2015, and German Embassy/Ankara told me that my application is in queue to be reviewed in Berlin Foreigners Registration Office. Now I have registered to another course starting on 23.11.2015, and I would like to get information about my visa status if possible.
My passport number is xxx, if required.

Thank you.

Kind regards.

Hallo,

Ich hatte registriert für Intensivkurs am Goethe Institut Berlin ab 26.10.2015. Ich bewarb mich für nationale Visa am 14.09.2015, und Deutsche Botschaft Ankara/erzählte mir, dass meine Anwendung in der Warteschlange zu überprüfen in Berlin Ausländerbüro. Jetzt habe ich registriert, einen anderen Kurs ab 23.11.2015, und ich würde gerne erhalten Sie Informationen über meine Visa status Wenn möglich. Mein Reisepass Nummer ist xxx, falls erforderlich.

Danke schön.

Mit vielen Grüßen."

Thank you for your time already.

Best regards.

Onur